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deskitty
deskitty
Des
Mon, Aug. 30th, 2004 07:06 pm
Sunflower (part 3)

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deskitty
deskitty
Des
Sun, Sep. 5th, 2004 12:51 am (UTC)

Oh yes. Yes, it had to be bitter. A story that starts with a pitched gang battle just can't end well. ;)

They've taken everything from him, but they can't take his mind. Or can they?

You, my friend, are an optimist. ;) You are very right, and the sunflower is a symbol of that. It may be surrounded by filth, choking off its air and water, but goddammit, it's going to live.

But there's also a message there: "Sometimes, shit happens, and there's not a damn thing we can do about it." The sunflower gets vaporized. And, well, what was the point to all that trying to live if it's just eating plasma exhaust in the end anyway?

In a metaphorical sense, Bret IS the sunflower. When he's thrown into that shuttle, he gets vaporized, too.

I love the irony of it. Very well done!

Well good, I'm glad at least one of us thinks so. ;)

I think parts one and two were very visceral in the right ways ... and part three got a bit gratuitous. I spent more time zapping him than I did illustrating just how totally and completely fucked he was from the moment they dragged him out of bed. I didn't make the guards--or the Denebian race in general--real enough. There are plenty more things I could say about it, but you get the idea. :)

Practice, I suppose. It was a good exercise, and one I'm at least 2/3rds proud of. We'll see if I keep going with this "writing" thing.


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